Nowadays, many families move overseas for job opportunities. Some people think this is beneficial for children of these families while others think children will find it difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people think that moving to the other developed countries is beneficial for their future. It is more

benefitial

promoting or enhancing well-being

beneficial

for the

childeren

a young person of either sex

children

. Some people think that if families move to other countries with their

children

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children, then

then

they may find it tough to survive. I have shared my views and opinion in the following paragraph.

To begin

with, If we talk about the benefits of shifted to abroad,

then

there are lots of benefits

specially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

for children. As in

developed

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developing

countries the children get good facilities whether it is about the education, sports, healthcare or any other field. In developed countries, most of them provide free education to

children even

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children, even

upto

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up to

high schools. The child

get

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gets

has got

is getting

various sports

activites

any specific behavior

activities

for the better growth.

about

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About

the healthcare services, people in these countries get better healthcare services and get great benefits from it. To continue with, on the other side apart from

benefits there

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benefits, there

are

also

some demerits for children of being shifted to other

countires

a politically organized body of people under a single government

countries

First scenerio

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The first scenario

First scenario

is that they do not get

familier

soon as their parents get to

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

culture people. They find it difficult to adjust at

new place

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the new place

a new place

, different people, different culture. Some children do not adjust with other children due to their shy nature and get disturbed of being lonely

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the new place. So these are

dificulties

an effort that is inconvenient

difficulties

that children may face in the overseas. To conclude, while shifting to the new place some children may find the

difficulyies

an effort that is inconvenient

difficulties

to adjust and some are having nature to meet the new people. So in my

opinion it

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opinion, it

is not necessary that it would happen to every child

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It depends on individuals not on everyone.

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