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Pollution from aircraft is one of the main factors responsible for global warming. What measures could be taken to reduce this source of climate change?

Nowadays, aviation is the safest and
most beneficial type
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the most beneficial type
 of
transport
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.
However
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, contamination produced by aircraft is one of the basic reasons which is accountable for global warming. In
this
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 essay, I will introduce some solutions from my point of view.
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, today's technology, which is developing rapidly, gives us many opportunities to make conditions to live and the environment better. Scientists and environmentalists are trying and to find new ways to reduce environmental pollution because today's harmful things influence our future surroundings.
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, in order to use gasoline, some modes of
transport
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 use an
electric
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electrical
 method of travel. Doubtlessly, if people had used an
electrical
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electric
 way, the atmosphere would have not suffered from aircraft.
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, a plane, which uses petrol to move is more harmful compared with an
airplane
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 moving by other types of energy.
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, air
transport
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 is not the only method of traffic for people. Exist other safer and more profitable types of travel that are less harmful than
airplanes
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.
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, they need to advance their capacities to the level of aviation. Good examples are railway
transport
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, ships, cars, which help to go through long roads. If other forms of traffic had developed more, people would have not used
airplanes
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, and its pollution would not affect global warming. To sum up, our environment is being suffered by various factors of pollution.
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, people should make the best decision and support by the financial side to save our planet
instead
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 of doing other adverse conditions for our surroundings.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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