some people say that it the responsibility of the richer countries to improve the health,education and trade in poorer countries.

The three factors, health, education and trade are very important now a days.
it
Suggestion
It
is
neccesary
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
for the development of poorer countries to work on it.Most people prefer that it is the responsibility of the governments of the richer countries to help in these factors of the poorer countries to improve it. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that it is the responsibility of
the richer
Suggestion
the rich
countries. Most people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that poorer countries need to develop their health, education, and trade sectors by
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
because these people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
belief
that no
one
is ready to help each other.Why
some
a human being
someone
one
invest their money
with
Suggestion
to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country? But they don't
now
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
about the advantages of these
invesment
Suggestion
investments
investment
.
It
Suggestion
It's
like
one
kind of a business.
For example
, china
invest
Suggestion
invests
their Millions
dollors
the basic monetary unit in many countries; equal to 100 cents
dollars
in
pakistan
a Muslim republic that occupies the heartland of ancient south Asian civilization in the Indus River valley; formerly part of India; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
Pakistan
for
Cpake
Suggestion
Spark
project.
it
Suggestion
It
is not only the benefit of Pakistani
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
china can
also
will eat fruits.These people prefer that in globe everyone can do
somethings
Suggestion
some things
by himself. Some people thought that it is the
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
of
the richer
Suggestion
the rich
countries to support poorer countries in
hardest situation
Suggestion
the hardest situation
because in
this
modern time
its
it is
it's
very important to create a good relationship with our neighbour countries.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
Covid-19
one
of unwanted situation
occured
come to pass
occurred
in the whole Globe. China full support
pakistan
a Muslim republic that occupies the heartland of ancient south Asian civilization in the Indus River valley; formerly part of India; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
Pakistan
in
this
pendamic
epidemic over a wide geographical area
pandemic
health issue because china know how may its important to us makes a good relationship with
pakistan
a Muslim republic that occupies the heartland of ancient south Asian civilization in the Indus River valley; formerly part of India; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
Pakistan
. In conclusion, Health, education and trade
is
Suggestion
are
very
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
for a country. And every richer development
countries
Suggestion
country
need
Suggestion
needs
to improve these factors in poorer
cuntries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
centuries
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
its not only the
responsilbity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
of the poorer country to improve
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