In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays there are some countries which have a high rate of
unemployment
citizens, some people suppose that these people do not necessary secondary
education
because they have a little chance of finding work. I would disagree that secondary
education
may lead to pretty good consequences which can decrease
this
rate.
Firstly
, One of the problems in the world which has not found yet the solution is
unemployment
. I believe that for finding job
education
is the most necessary things. As we now in primary
education
are not teaching certainly specialization.
Moreover
the main of the subject is made up general knowledge. It means that they knowledge don’t appropriate for clearly working condition. In
this
case secondary
education
can be vitally important because they students, which graduated secondary
education
gathered specific information
such
as opportunities, prospect, working process and etc. They have already gained the specific experience for a job within training at the university.
In other words
employer try to seek specialist with deep knowledge.
Secondly
, increasing of
unemployment
can carry on without stop. If they have a secondary
education
can affect the
unemployment
rate to fall. In
this
case, they should focus on bringing together people who have achieved success in their lives.
therefore
Suggestion
Therefore
, they should share their life experiences with teenagers who are in primary school.
this
Suggestion
This
can lead to a sense of motivation in the lives of young people.
In addition
, these experienced people can take out a bank loan and start their own business. In
this
way, they can provide jobs for citizens, which is very essential.
Although
it is not to be easy. In conclusion,
unemployment
is a problem which still solution does not find because problem connected clearly with deficiency
education
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