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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But other say film should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The main objective of movies is to amuse the people.It is said by some individuals that educational film should be
made in
Suggestion
made in order to make
order
 make the life of people more convenient.In my perspective, pictures should be made on all the topics and both the viewpoints will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
film industry
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the film industry
 is famous for pleasing the people. Actors perform roles on different issues
.
Accept space
.
They make us happy and sad through their roles. Some of the movies are based on drama, comedy, action
,
Accept space
,
thriller and mystery and people get
lot
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a lot
 of satisfaction
by
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from
 watching these kind of movies.
For instance
,
bollywood
the film industry of India
Bollywood
 and
hollywood
the film industry of the United States
Hollywood
 industry is famous for cheering the people worldwide and the aim of
this
 is to entertain the people so, unique issues are selected by these industries in
order
 to make people satisfied.
On the other hand
, it is said by others that films should be made on different topics related to educational field
such
 as science, mathematics, arts
,
Accept space
,
commerce and literature.It will put a positive impact on the people because it can create the interest of students in the studies To illustrate, a survey was conducted in the year of 2017 and its result was that seventy percent youngsters commit crime because they were inspired by movies so, in
order
 to bring change in the society educational films must be made in
order
 to make edcation more interesting. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that it is vivid that all
kind
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kinds
 of films are essential so educational as well as other films should be made in
order
 to make life balanced.
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