Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential. How could computers be considered a hindrance?

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Modern technologies are definitely playing an increasingly important role in our lives. They have already penetrated almost all spheres of human activities. Nowadays, we cannot imagine our regular day without our gadgets, computers and the Internet. There are two opinions that some people consider that the complete computerization is more interfering and a negative process, when other perceive it as a positive one.

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of help for modern society? Humanity reacts to everything new completely differently, as in principle to any changes in their lives. Some of them enjoy the new technologies and the advent of the computer, because machines have made our life and our job easier, they provide many opportunities for society

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as work and education from the four corners of the world and they are

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new experience and increased human potential. The computer as some kind of a super machine which can replace a lot of things inside one “little box” – library, television, notebook, telephone, typewriter and

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list could be extended indefinitely. Other people are afraid and believe that you cannot trust your life to the machine. They have already changed our life quite a lot and have more control and power over it: many people have lost and will lose their jobs, because computers have learned how to do

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of them. Some people just do not want to accept the new system, study and get use to it.

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, many functions that are already the norm for them - a smart home, unmanned driving and a robot-doctor - require

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of quality and unfortunately sometimes they are insecure and do not work very well and people should spend a lot of time for service or repair.

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why some people think that it is just a waste of time and it is easier to entrust

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a person. In my opinion the computer is a great and incredible invention and

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our assistant. I do not consider the complete computerization as a negative process. I find it as

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of the logical development of humanity and a human way of thinking. I believe that people should consider the peculiarities of the modern world and do not try to close themselves from technologies, but rather find the advantages of

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new trend and find their place in the new world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

409 words

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Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential. How could computers be considered a hindrance?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government university?

The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?