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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#room #college #student #arrangement #work #accommodation #officer #situation #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention the adjustment problems I am facing while living in
college
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 residence on
shared
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 basis. Let me explain my situation in more detail. I live in room 103 which is on ground level and near to entrance. I usually
work
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quiet
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 environment. There is so much noise that I have to deal with
every-time
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 I
work
. Opening/closing of doors, groups cracking jokes loudly kind of situations really distract me from my job.
Moreover
, My roommate is a guitar player. Sometimes he has to practice at the same time
of
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 my job, which really
make
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 us both uncomfortable. I would like to move to a
one bedroom
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 unit so that my
work
 requirements do not
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effect
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 anyone and vice-versa.
Also
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 it would be much appreciable if I can get
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in
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 one of the top floors. Not only I will be able to concentrate
my
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work
, but
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 it will help me stay away from entrance noises. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Simranjit
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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