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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Certain people argue that spending money on extra curricular fields is not worth, Despite the regime should support the civilian services financially
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 as schools and
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 care system and so on as
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 all play a vital role in forming the healthy and wealthy continent. I believe, if the public services have the regime as their prime investor, they would bring a myriad of change around the
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. A good reason to contribute money on public services is that it would provide an equality among all the civilians. As government supports the educational institutes, everyone will have access to get admitted and obtain a knowledge.
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 will have an increasing number of educated and well qualified workers, which make the leading and wealthy
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. Take a Canada as an illustration, all most everyone is able to admit in the school or college as the Canada authority has made education free and
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 why over 70% of the population is educated there. Another point to consider is that, if the
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 system has a government support, everyone would abolish from a dangerous
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 diseases. At present, almost half of the population of the world is dying due to some type of
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 issues
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 because of the to the lack of
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 centre where they can not afford to take a treatment.
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, as per the 2019 survey done by the Oxford University students, 80% of the hospitals are not accepting the destitute folks as they are not capable to pay the fees. In conclusion, hospital and the school are the elementary public services sectors that should have the full authority support in order to bring the
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 on the list of wealthy and leading countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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