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Boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons to support your opinion.

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It is true that nowadays
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 have a great influence over
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 children. Some people hold the opinion that the same sex is the major
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 of influencing
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, but others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I agree that boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. My arguments for
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 point are listed below. First of all, a father is
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 person who
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 already passed
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ways
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 which
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his son is passing now,
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, sons are following
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 father’s footsteps. So, based on experience it is easy for a father to notice his sons’ drawbacks and to influence them.
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, it is true that a boy is
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 human , but a girl is a subtle and fragile one. It is hard for mothers to influence their sons
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 because it is not likely that vulnerable something can affect a strong one. In conclusion, it seems to me unfair that boys are most influenced by their mothers. Based on at least two points above I strongly agree that children are influenced by a parent of the same gender.
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