these days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant period of time, either to find a job or study. there are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. do advantages outweight its disadvantages?

Intro As travel and movement between countries of the
worlds
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becomes simpler, people are increasingly moving away from their homes in search of a better life. There are
clearly
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advantages to moving countries, as the process itself is difficult and
otherwise
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nobody would do it,
however
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once in-
country
there are definitely challenges for newcomers. As a migrant, I believe that the advantages do outweigh the issues faced when moving to a new
country
, whether for
work
or travel. p1 advantages Benefits to moving to another
country
for
work
or study - Life improvement -- Access to opportunities not available in home
country
--- e.g. Higher paid jobs / better
work
conditions, study in a field not available/ very difficult to access at home -- Better lifestyle --- e.g. Better balance between
work
hours and leisure time p2 disadvantages Disadvantages of moving to another
country
for
work
or study - Difficulty with integration into a new society -- Language and customs can be a significant barrier --- Language may take years to learn,
while
customs from home
country
may directly clash with those in the new countrycountry --- e.g. May take years, or even decades before newcomers are considered part of the local community -- Not fitting in may make it difficult to join local organisations, clubs,
as well as
limit success in business Summary As the world continues to become more connected, and borders more fluid, the attraction of moving countries in search of something better will grow. My view is that the benefits of immigration do outweigh the downsides,
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the extent of the net improvement depends on one's situation and expectations.
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