these days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant period of time, either to find a job or study. there are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. do advantages outweight its disadvantages?
Intro As travel and movement between countries of the
worlds
becomes simpler, people are increasingly moving away from their homes in search of a better life. There are Fix the agreement mistake
world
clearly
advantages to moving countries, as the process itself is difficult and Change the adverb
clear
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otherwise
nobody would do it, Add a comma
otherwise,
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however
once in-Add a comma
however,
country
there are definitely challenges for newcomers. As a migrant, I believe that the advantages do outweigh the issues faced when moving to a new Use synonyms
country
, whether for Use synonyms
work
or travel. p1 advantages Benefits to moving to another Use synonyms
country
for Use synonyms
work
or study - Life improvement -- Access to opportunities not available in home Use synonyms
country
--- e.g. Higher paid jobs / better Use synonyms
work
conditions, study in a field not available/ very difficult to access at home -- Better lifestyle --- e.g. Better balance between Use synonyms
work
hours and leisure time p2 disadvantages Disadvantages of moving to another Use synonyms
country
for Use synonyms
work
or study - Difficulty with integration into a new society -- Language and customs can be a significant barrier --- Language may take years to learn, Use synonyms
while
customs from home Linking Words
country
may directly clash with those in the new countrycountry --- e.g. May take years, or even decades before newcomers are considered part of the local community -- Not fitting in may make it difficult to join local organisations, clubs, Use synonyms
as well as
limit success in business Summary As the world continues to become more connected, and borders more fluid, the attraction of moving countries in search of something better will grow. My view is that the benefits of immigration do outweigh the downsides, Linking Words
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however
the extent of the net improvement depends on one's situation and expectations.Add a comma
however,
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite