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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people refer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss both these view points and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many people take the option to change jobs while others prefer not to. In my essay, I will explain the good and bad points of the above attitudes.
One
 of the main benefits of staying in
one
job
 is security.
Changing employer
Suggestion
The changing employer
 often means a period of instability, where
one
 may have to think about moving house, or temporarily losing a steady source of income. Staying in
one
job
 means these problems are avoided. Another benefit of not changing occupation is that
one
 is able to gain much experience and expertise in his or her profession,
thus
 enhancing
job
 security. Their company may recognize their loyalty and reward their service.
In contrast
, those who
often change
Suggestion
often changes
 jobs may be seen as unreliable and employers might be reluctant to hire and
invest training in
Suggestion
invest in training
 them.
However
, there are
also
 arguments in favour of changing
job
 frequently.
One
 is that a worker improves his employability. Working in several different jobs often means that the individual has more skills.
Such
 people are seen as more dynamic and versatile. Another benefit of changing jobs
frequently is
Suggestion
has frequently been
 that
one
 never gets stuck in the same routine. People may get bored when they spent too long in a
job
. Following
this
, the quality of their work would suffer.
Also
, increased wages and promotion are often easier to attain by changing jobs. Overall, it can be said that the disadvantages of changing jobs are the advantages of staying with
one
 company, and vice versa. In my opinion, I feel that changing jobs every once in a while, is of
more benefit
Suggestion
most benefit
.
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