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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that tourists from other countries should be charged higher for visiting cultural and historical destinations than local visitors. I totally disagree with
this
 viewpoint. From my perspective, the argument in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of higher prices for overseas visitors would derive from the need for a conservation funding increase, which could be used to invest in maintaining those local places of interest.
However
, most cultural and historical spots are already subsidized by both the local authority as well as inhabitants through the tax system as one of their responsibilities.
Furthermore
, aside from tourist attraction entrance fees, international visitors contribute an enormous amount of money to the indigenous economy through their purchases of other products and services,
such
 as food, accommodation, and other leisure activities. That amount could be used for local site development. In turn, the government and residents should stabilize prices to encourage more tourists to come and visit.
In addition
 to that, if
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 realized that they would have to pay higher for visiting cultural and historical spots in a particular nation, they would only have "once of a lifetime" trips and never return.
Therefore
, the number of tourists would decline, but the problem could be exacerbated when those
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 share with their circles of people.
For example
, there has been an explosion in the use of social networking sites on which travel
vloggers
a person who keeps and updates a blog
bloggers
 speak from their negative experiences affecting others' perspectives. Due to that domino effect, even a nation's image would be spoiled. Another result could be the inefficiency of funding needed for the maintenance of these important buildings. In conclusion, I believe that overseas
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 should not be required to pay higher than local visitors if a country expects to be more attractive to the rest of the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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