Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations. Other think that it is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

There is a popular belief that
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countries
need financial support from
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community,
while
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others
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think that assistance
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medical products, educational programs and consultancy are more necessary. In my opinion,
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help in the form of money
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less practical than other types of essential aid and advice. It is true that economic solutions
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an enormous role in developing
countries
. With economic aid packages,
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governments can use them to enhance technology and invest in scientific and technical
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research
to promote economic development and solve economic problems.
However
, not all
countries
utilize the external monetary flows
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efficiently
, especially developing
countries
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because
of their poor quality in infrastructure and labour force.
Besides
, there is a big risk of receiving a large amount of money from developed nations since
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countries
do not have enough experience to use financial
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to the fullest.
This
thing can easily lead to
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terrible debt.
On the other hand
, I firmly believe that other forms of assistance are more needed. The explanation for my conviction is that society development makes
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develop,
while
poor
countries
have limited resources to tackle problems which are related to society, like education, health care, crime or unemployment.
Therefore
, making use of utilizing in specific solution in each field is the best way.
For instance
, experienced organizations can provide experts from all fields to developing nations to help them improve technology, develop education or solve social problems. With their useful
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and
supports
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support
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,
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countries
can
absord
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acquire
more
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modern
knowledge to advance
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of human resources which play an important role as a core force in making society and
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economy
better. In conclusion, I have a strong point that global help should come
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practial
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practical
aid and advice.
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