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It is not neccessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can just learn much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree ?

#neccessary #travel #places #culture #people #books #films #internet
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Most of people think that it is
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 to
travel to
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travel, to
 know about various cultures. But I agree with understanding of different cultures through books, film and
internet
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 because it is entirely possible in the 4.0 era.
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, people can save a great deal of time and money by watching movies, reading books and surfing the
internet
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.
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.
This
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 is
more cheaper
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cheaper
 than
high expense
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the high expense
 of abroad trips
.
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.
 And
instead
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 of spending many weeks and months to see and know about new cultures
.
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.
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, my
cousin
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cousin, although
although
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 he has never been to China
,
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,
 he has so much knowledge of
China
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Chinese
 culture.
Secondly
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, the information from
media
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the media
 is limitless and was updated on a daily basis. You can find diversity view about
this
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 destination and avoid the risks.
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, after reading a book about Japan my friend didn't eat puffer fish because he had known it might contain poison.
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,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to other places is not
simple thing
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a simple thing
 and it may bot suitable for the elderly, the invalid. So everybody can just learn from books, films, and the
internet
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. In conclusion, I believe that we can travel abroad if we want to have some experience. But we can learn more through travel guidebooks
,
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,
films or the
internet
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