Some people believe that violance on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society.other deny that these factors have any significant influence on peoples' behaviour.What is your opinion.

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society

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have

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has

a belief that

violance

an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)

violence

television

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shows and in

computer

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games bring ruinous affect to the

society

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.Some neglect these aspects are not being reasons for the peoples' deportment.As my opinion

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I believe that violation on

television

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and in

computer

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games could be badly

effected

acted upon; influenced

affected

for humans' life style. On one hand

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discussing regarding

brutality

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on the

television

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and

computer

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games are not

crutial

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

to the

individuals

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individual's

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life until people copy them.

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instance shooting

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instance, shooting

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killing people

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drug

smuglers

someone who imports or exports without paying duties

smugglers

smuggler

can be seen in video games.But as a human being we should

tactfull

having or showing a sense of what is fitting and considerate in dealing with others

tactful

tasteful

to make sense that they are not

pratical

concerned with actual use or practice

practical

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many

bilieve

accept as true; take to be true

believe

believed

believes

that

brutality

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television

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is the greatest influence for repeat them in the

society

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some people who are used to

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watching

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and movies as their routine habit.It will automatically become them to the movie

lifestyle

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lifestyle, such

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as harming family members

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stealing money

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instantly make angry themselves.In

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brutality

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on video games

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an influence to the

society

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as same as

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.It could be ruined kids' mind easier than the

television

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because

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they have been made especially for kids to get their attraction.Kids will absolutely try to follow what

thay

people in general

they

can see within video games. In conclusion

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though some

bilieve

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that the

brutality

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television

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and in the

computer

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games don't affect to the

society

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.I believe that they can make

humongous threat

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the humongous threat

humongous threats

a humongous threat

in the community.

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this

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can be a disaster to the present growing youth and future generation.

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Some people believe that violance on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society.other deny that these factors have any significant influence on peoples' behaviour.What is your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is neither nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?