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The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land in sea.What are the reasons and solutions?

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Animal habitats have indeed been
overexploited
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over exploited
 by humans to serve their purposes which made many species are being endangered in both land and sea.
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if everyone acts responsibly
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 these radical concepts may be revived. The main reasons that lead straight to the consequences of animal’s extinction are fishing and hunting.These two sports had widely accepted to be legal and became affordable for all classes in society.
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a huge number of creatures disappeared under the sight of the authority.Blue parrot
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a beautiful bird
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that's
 been hunted down for entertaining until there were only two individuals left before the local government could recognize. Another reason which explains why animals extirpated is pollution.Undoubtedly
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humans had colonized the whole planet and so the animal’s territories nowadays have converted into the amusement areas.Even worse
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people often leave trash behind which unconsciously causing many tragic deaths from
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suffocating
 and poisoned in animals.
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it is not surprising when it comes to catastrophe event
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government should promulgate some laws that prohibited excessive hunting as well as fishing.
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the authority could raise people’s awareness through propaganda and the mass media
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were
 often gains the most attention of people about protecting nature.
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the problem of pollution could not be tackled by the
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government, but
 more likely by the citizens via their actions on changing
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 painful notion. In conclusion
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something that is a source of danger
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 enormous.By participating in the restoring works which have been noticed above
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nature will be preserved and all kinds will be free from extirpation.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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