Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.
It is
agrue
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argued
that
whether Correct word choice
apply
women
should participate in Use synonyms
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the military
a military
military like
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military-like
men
or not. Use synonyms
While
some people think Linking Words
women
should be given Use synonyms
chance
to choose Correct article usage
the chance
military
as a career , Add an article
the military
i
think some disadvantages of joining Change the capitalization
I
military
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the military
of
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for
women
Use synonyms
is
quite significant. On the one hand, it is undeniable that Correct subject-verb agreement
are
women
possess intelligence as good as Use synonyms
men
, even sometimes they are trusted more than Use synonyms
men
by their carefulness. They have Use synonyms
also
contributed significantly to the successes in some vital areas Linking Words
such
as government or military. Linking Words
For example
, Bui Thi Xuan is an outstanding female general of Tay Son who led Vietnamese soldiers to defeat invaders from Linking Words
Qing
dynasty. Correct article usage
the Qing
Besides
, letting Linking Words
women
join the army Use synonyms
also
shows advances Linking Words
about
sexual equality. Through thousands of Change preposition
in
year
in the past, Fix the agreement mistake
years
military
was considered Add an article
the military
as
a Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
men
responsibility. Change noun form
man's
Therefore
, when Linking Words
women
embark on Use synonyms
military
, Add an article
the military
this
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men
to reduce the burdenUse synonyms
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
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make
them more Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
sympathy
to Replace the word
sympathetic
men
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, when some Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
women
get achievements in Use synonyms
military
, they will be more confident and they can raise their position which leads to more Correct article usage
the military
possitive
views of sexists. Correct your spelling
positive
On the other hand
, because Linking Words
Correct article usage
the millitary
millitary
is a career that requires strength a lot, Correct your spelling
military
men
have Use synonyms
overwhelming
advantage compared to Add an article
an overwhelming
the overwhelming
women
when Use synonyms
men
are biologically much Use synonyms
more strong
than Correct word choice
stronger
women
. Use synonyms
Women
Use synonyms
is
likely to find Change the verb form
are
more
difficult to take military equipment or walk Correct pronoun usage
it more
in
a long distance. In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
although
there are some reasons supporting Linking Words
women
to join the military, Use synonyms
i
believe that they Change the capitalization
I
also
should consider carefully Linking Words
about
choosing it as their careerChange preposition
apply
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
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- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion