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Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With no doubts education plays a significant role in people's lives and their future career. Many people thought, that gaining a good level of knowledge at school is on the students and their desire to learn.
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, some believe that the teachers are responsible for students academic success. I think that, both factors matter, but at the end it all depends on those who learn. On the one hand, having a good professor at any level of education is crucial for students to understand and learn the subject.
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, students, especially young people are more interested in the theme when it is explained by a person who is making a profession by calling not by the order. For instant, science subjects can be hard for some students, but with a correct approach even they can be taught. On the other side, the final success is in the students' hands.
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, the learner attitudes matters the most. If someone is willing to obtain the best results he or she can do it anyway.
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, people who hear the lectures, do their own research and study hard will probably be more successful because of their attitude.
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, in my view, a combination of both, having a good teacher and student's behaviour is the best way to academic success.
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, willingness to learn has a major impact
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 education. In conclusion, educational achievements definitely depends on the student's actions, but having a good teacher makes gaining knowledge easier and more pleasant.
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