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Agree Disagree: Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
Everyone wants huge
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Everyone wants a huge
 salary in
order
 to get
the better
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the best
 facilities in life. Some individuals think that
money
 is more important rather than
job
satisfaction
 in
order
 to enjoy basic amenities of life. In my perspective,
money
 is really important in
order
 to enjoy life and my viewpoints will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs
To begin
 with, these days due to the modernization and urbanization living expenses of people have increased so they need more
money
 in
order
 to fulfil their demands and they prefer to earn more
money
 rather than
job
satisfaction
. Another reason is that it is impossible to get
job
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a job
the job
 according the
satisfaction
 level of anyone because every organization consider its profit rather than matching the preferring the
job
satisfaction
 of persons,
On the other hand
, these days due to competition and unemployment people prefer to have
job
Suggestion
jobs
 rather than
satisfaction
 because their main motive is to earn
money
 and without
money
 no one can satisfy his/ her wants
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, A survey was conducted in the year 2016 in the city of Delhi and its result was that seventy percent people of Delhi were employed for
money
 in all the multinational companies rather than having
job
satisfaction
. TO recapitulate, I would like to write that these
days
Suggestion
day's
 main
priority
Suggestion
priorities
is
Suggestion
are
money
 for people and they prefer only
money because
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money, because
 if they have
money
 than they can get
satisfaction
 itself
.
Accept space
.
So
,
Accept space
,
 people are more focussed to earn
money
 rather than having
job
satisfaction
.
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