Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowsadays
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Nowadays
, international
torism
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
terrorism
in individual and
torism
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
as a whole has boomed as global trends.
This
is a
debates
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debate
that
this
industry brings more conflicts between nations rather than facilitates understanding. I agree with
this
viewpoint at some extent,
this
essay will discuss about both bright sights and drawbacks In terms of drawbacks, the improper attitude and poor
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
can be
reson
a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
of conflicts between visitors and locals. There are some people who travel with negative attitudes. They are not
to open
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open
to
new culture
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new cultures
a new culture
and do not want to adapt
with
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to
spcieal
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
special
circumstances.
For instance
, a group Korean
visitors
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visitor
visitted
go to see a place, as for entertainment
visited
to Da Nang in sensitive times when the germ of corona
pademic
epidemic over a wide geographical area
pandemic
apeared
give a certain impression or have a certain outward aspect
appeared
. They are determined not to isolate under the direction of healthy ministry and say negative feedbacks about quality service in Viet Nam on media.
This
makes
netizens
stir up waves which lead to a little tension between Viet Nam and Korea.
Moreover
, The lack of knowledge about a new custom of foreigner
also
can create serious conflicts. To illustrate, Some western
vistors
someone who visits
visitors
visitted
go to see a place, as for entertainment
visited
to pagodas or tempers in Viet Nam with unsuitable outfits,
as a result
they were prevented to enter. The indeliberate misunderstanding arise
argument
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an argument
between tourist and security.
On the other hand
, international tourism
obiviously
unmistakably ('plain' is often used informally for 'plainly')
obviously
brings opportunity to facilitate understanding between people from different cultures. While social media
ond
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
newspaper give people some foreign
culture
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cultural
information, travelling aboard gives tourist authentic experiences about unique customs. Tourists
will explained
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will explain
about
core values
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the core values
of that customs by local residents which
leat
take somebody somewhere
lead
to more profound understanding.
In addition
, after
experiecing
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiencing
traditional culture
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the traditional culture
of
visited country
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the visited country
visited countries
, a lot of
traveller
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travellers
have desire to be a part of
country
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the country
. They decided to settle and willing to embrace cultural differences. In conclusion, international tourism allows overseas visitors to experience different cultures and
therefore
connects everyone through mutual understanding. In my opinion, we should not merely judge the industry based on a number of situations where conflicts arise from
misconduct
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the misconduct
of only a group of individuals.
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