Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Every
organisation
make
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makes
effort
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an effort
efforts
to improve the result of its
organisation
. Different people have different viewpoints. Some individuals believe that students who perform better should get reinforcement
,
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,
while
other
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others
believe that
school
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schools
the school
should only
reward
those who showed improvement in their academic result. In my perspective
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,
school
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the school
schools
should
reward
both
type
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types
of students and my viewpoints will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, when any school
organisation
give
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gives
rewards to toppers
then
they get
motivation
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the motivation
and encouragement to perform well in studies. It is seen everywhere that student who
score
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scores
highest marks
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the highest marks
in their class get scholarship and gifts from the
organisation
which boost the confidence of
child
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the child
a child
children
. Child
also
get satisfaction when he/ she is rewarded by any
organisation
and
also
tries to perform with more energy. If a child does not get any
reward
and appreciation for performing well
then
he/she can neglect his/her studies and feel depressed. So
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,
its
it is
it's
very important to appreciate child to improve his performance.
On the other hand
, it is
also
essential to
reward
average students who showed improvement as compared to their previous academic records.
For instance
, these
days many
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days, many
schools have organized extra classes for those students who performed academically
poor
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poorly
and it
also
rewards students who showed little improvement and it is the best way to understand these students and correct them. To recapitulate
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,
I would like to write that all students are
equal so
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equal, so
equally so
, schools should
reward
all
kind
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kinds
of students in order to improve the education level.
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