You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: give details of what went wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take

Dear
Mr.
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Joffrey, I have recently stayed in your Marvel
hotel
, for three nights. The temperature was unusually higher during
this
period and unfortunate, the air conditioner in my
room
was not fully operational. I am writing
this
letter to complain about the bad experience I have had due to
this
and would like to take steps so that it does not happen again. I checked into the
hotel
at midnight on 14th July and directly went to bed.
However
, after turning on the cooling system (A.C), I realized that the
room
was not getting cooler and the temperature was quite high. Eventually, I called the
hotel
staff to solve the problem, but they could not do anything.
Moreover
, no other
room
was available.
Therefore
, I stay in
this
room
and open the window and rely on the natural air to cool my place. I had to sleep in skimpy clothes due to
overcome
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the heat. Noise from the street came through the open windows which disturbed my sleep. It was shocking and unexpected for me to spend a huge amount of money and yet experience three terribly uncomfortable nights. Perhaps you would consider refunding me some money and giving me
discount
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if I ever come to your
hotel
again.
Besides
, fix the air conditioner system in every
room
in your
hotel
so that other guests do not suffer the way I did. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Pinky Vivek.
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