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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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I agree with the people, who
says
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 that
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education
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the education
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system
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, from kindergarten to higher studies
are
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 emphasising and spending much time
in
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learning
theories
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 rather than practical
skills
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.
Education
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 is
the
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 significant part of our
life
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, and it is the only key
for
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the
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 better future
of
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our
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 next generation. But our
education
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system
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 is designed in
such
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 a way, which focuses only on learning
theories
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 and scoring good marks. Usually,
theories
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 help us to learn everything and deeper understanding of a concept by reading and imagining. It
also
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 teaches us through the experience of others, by which we can easily understand, why one method is successful
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 another fails. But whatever we
learned
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 through
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 with no practical experience retains only for a short period of time.
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Whereas practical
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Practical
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 learning helps us, to learn through experimenting
by
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on
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own
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our own
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 and it
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 improves the self-confidence of the
students
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. The
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 gained through practical
skills
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, always
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last
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 forever in our memory bank. For
an
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instance, when I was studying
eighth-grade
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eighth grade
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, our Science teacher taught us a concept by doing a practical demonstration in the class. i.e. The pressure, under the water is directly proportional to its depth.
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 I have studied so many concepts and
theories
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 in my schooling, most of them
got
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vanished from my memory, but expect
this
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 one. The
students
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 who are sound in theoretical
skills
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 are struggling in their
career
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careers
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, as all companies are interested in taking practically sound
students
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. So I agree that our
education
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system
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 is lagging in learning practical
skills
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. In my perspective, theory and practice are two sides of the same coin. So, our
education
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system
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 must focus on giving equal importance to theory and
practical
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, for the better future of the
students
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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