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These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, having more than one
job
 is becoming increasingly popular. For many people, it is an opportunity to switch to another
job
 during their
career
. In my opinion, there are both pros and cons in deciding to do it. There are various reasons why people change their
career
 and one explanation is that they have the chance to meet people from different background and work in different environment,
thus
 broaden the horizons.
For example
, a seller can apply for a consultant or accountant position, in which they
can
Suggestion
Can
 learn more about problem-solving and detail-oriented skills.
In addition
, knowledge and experience accumulated from previous jobs can
also
 be applicable in the future as jobs can be highly connected to each other. It can be explained by certain jobs having the same requirements and skill
sets
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Sets
such
 as accountant, financial
advisory
Suggestion
advisor
adviser
 and auditors.
Moreover
, it might take a long time to figure out their dream
job
 and destination, so it is understandable that many people work 2 or 3 jobs until they can
finally
 pursue their dream. The KFC founder is famous for his success and passion in
fast
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Fast
 food chains at the age of 60s after doing numerous jobs.
In contrast
, many argue that working 2 or 3 jobs can be detrimental to their
career
. Indeed, for certain jobs
such
 as lawyers and doctors, choosing another
job
 after spending from 5 to 10 years to get professional qualifications can be seen as distractions and a waste of time and money by the
opponents
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Opponents
.
Therefore
, it is beneficial to stay focused in their majors during their life. It can
also
 be
difficult
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Difficult
 and hard to cope with the sudden changes in workplace as workers have to start from scratch.
As a result
, the employers are more likely to recruit experienced employees rather than amateurs. In conclusion, changing
career
 does bring benefits to workers to broaden their horizons but it still
as
Suggestion
As
 many drawbacks in terms of time loss and experience.
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