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As most people spend their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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 moment many adults are spending more days on full-time jobs and a quality of their lives require a high demand. So,
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 should and must provide a huge opportunity for acquisition a
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 satisfaction, because it is very important for a person's well-being. There are many factors, which contributes to our happiness at the
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.
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, everyone knows that money, more specifically a high salary, absolutely increases a pleasure from what we are doing and for what we are working.
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, nowadays, teenagers have been choosing the
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 that will bring them a high rank in the society and give them an opportunity to get high waves. But,
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, parents and teachers are saying that the choice of
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 should depend on our hobbies and favourite subjects.
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, if a student gets a satisfaction from learning chemistry or biology, I think it is a better way to choose a post as a doctor or biologist to be happy until the death. Of course not everyone will enjoy their
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. Hard economics and life realities mean that people have less choices in the kind of
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 that they can get.
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, many students and adults can not get a
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 because of high requirements and pressure. From what has been discussed above, here should be drawn a conclusion. Even though it is unlikely that all workers do feel happy in their
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, I think and believe it is not unrealistic to promote more
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 satisfaction in any profession. If we can change everything,
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the job
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 will be definitely improved and more workers will feel greater degrees of happiness in all jobs.

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