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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The professional contentment of an individual is considered by many a more vital thing than securing an
employment
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. Others,
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, believe that later is more valuable as work satisfaction is never a lasting phenomenon. In my opinion, I consider that the professional contentment is more important than a secured
employment
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. On the one hand, more people opine that permanent and lasting nature of
job
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 carries more weightage. They explicitly support their viewpoint by saying that work satisfaction is more of a temporary thing that varies from time to time. It seems logical that a permanent
employment
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 can prevent a person loosing a position, particularly in certain health condition when one cannot join the work, any time sooner.
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 post-retirement pension and health insurances are a few benefits which are of a significant value to a person, specifically, once he turning old.
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, securing an
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 definitely adds comfort to an individual's life.
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, remaining people always opt to have satisfaction in their career which will be given more happiness, so that they will give more priority to the
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 where they have been working because they don't think about other benefits
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 as health, pensions and other concerns. They will be working
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 to achieve their deadlines and get awards and
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 level positions. According to them, if we satisfied with the task what they are doing, other benefits will be credited automatically because of that they will always think about task amusement in a priority. In conclusion, people will be having wide range opinions whether to have the
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 amusement is more important or other benefits, but in my opinion, I would have to prefer the
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 amusement will be playing a vital role in the individual's life which helps to live happily.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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