Only 20% of Tech Jobs are Held by Women. What problems do women face that prevent them from getting these jobs and what must be done to change this situation?

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Men have dominated
job
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sector since the
industry
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industrial
revolution, despite progress in
gender
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equality. Men still seem to outnumber the women in terms of employment in
tech business
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the tech business
. In
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essay I shall discuss the issues tossed against women in securing these jobs and changes that need to be put forth to reduce
this
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inequality. Regardless of having equal or superior skills to their male counterpart, women often feel societal pressure and cultural norms work against them while seeking jobs. Interviewers question the female applicants about their
martial
of or relating to the state of marriage
marital
and parental status to understand their personal commitments before offering them the
job
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,
hence
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women are pushed to carefully guard their details in an interview, so they don’t lose out on the
job
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.
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, not having a
collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
degree or
computer science graduation
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a computer science graduation
tend
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tends
to lower their confidence at
workplace
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work place
or when applying for jobs, because in many cultures’ families encourage men to pursue higher education while women are pushed performed household activities. For
instances in
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instance, in
instance in
Asian countries people believe that men are
bread winners
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the bread winners
of the family as well as invest in their
education but
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education, but
on the other hand
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women are taught to take care of the home and perform domestic work. All these factors make the career path of a woman more challenging. Many women
activist
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activists
across the globe have brought up
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issue to the society and fought
gender
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equality in
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job market
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the job market
. As
result
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a result
of
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,
today many
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today, many
corporate companies incorporated polices to ensure their
work force
the force of workers available
workforce
have equal number of women and men
employee
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employed
. Other than
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IT sector need
diligently transform
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to diligently transform
their corporate culture to respect all employees,
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make discrimination and
gender
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inequality socially unacceptable. These changes will make the womenfolk feel more secure and boost their morality,
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we can perhaps close the gap between
gender
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disparity. To conclude, cultural norms need to change in employment and educational settings to permanently eliminate the problem of
gender
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discrimination, so every woman can feel confident, supported and safe as they pursue their dreams.
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