Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples.

Over the centuries human have coexisted with animals, as
result
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a result
results
today, we can witness domesticated animals being present in many homes. While others argue the safety of family members, particularly children as many newspapers have reported children mauled by
animals but
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animals, but
I am at opine that pets harming people
is
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are
over emphasised and these actions are very negligible. Having pets at home
bring
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brings
positive attitude in children as they take care of these animals from the toddler age and having been raised together, creates
deeper bond
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a deeper bond
between them. For
instances
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instance
, a popular infotainment channel conducted a study for families with pets and without them in London. The main purpose of the study is to understand the attitude of children who grew up with pets and those who did not. The results showcased that
pet
owners had more compassion and helped to develop their cognitive skills as they perform
diverse range
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a diverse range
of actions
such
as grooming, feeding, medications and engaging in
paly
participate in games or sport
play
time.
Consequently
, children’s social and mental health were improved through exposure of pets. On the flip side, one might argue that pets are
threat
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a threat
to toddlers when left unsupervised.
This
is completely a false statement as
pet
behaviour is a direct effect of how the caretaker’s upbringing is. When a
pet
undergoes appropriate training at
young age
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a young age
it is well behaved even in the presence of infants.
Although
there have been occasional cases of exotic pets hurting children,
such
incidents are
rare
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rarely
or less significant as most of the folks keep dogs, cats and rodents as pets. To conclude, pets do enforce a positive impact on children psychologically
,
Accept space
,
family owing a
pet
is
good thing
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a good thing
to do.
Government
Suggestion
The government
should introduce policies to prevent unethical breeding of pets and illegally using pets for tournaments and for monetary benefits in fights as these two factors contribute to trigger aggression in pets.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
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