People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every nation has its own customs
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traditions and rituals
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It is said by some individuals that
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a person should
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stick to these
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because
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it is
really crucial
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to opt these in order to get acceptance
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in a new country.
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In my perspective, an individual must learn
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new traditions but he should not forget his/ her own
culture
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To begin
with, when
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any person
migrate
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migrates
to a new country
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then he/she learns the language of that particular nation in order to get job
opportunties
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opportunities
there because without acquiring the knowledge of these
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it is impossible to survive in a new nation
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so if a person
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wants to get the complete acceptance
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and appreciation by other people,
then
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it is
mandatory for him/her to learn those
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efficiently.
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For instance, one of my friend named Harkirat Kaur
relocted
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relocated
located
in Canada in 2014 and she had faced a lot of
diificulties
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difficulties
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in her
iniitial
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initial
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yeras
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years
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the
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job because she
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did not know
the
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another
culture
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therefore she felt lonely at office parties because
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she did not
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learn some of the basic
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cultural norms of Canadian society,
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but after
an
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year she realized the importance of these
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and
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gained the understanding of foreign
culture
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As a result.
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she got
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promotion and increase in salary after two years.
On the other hand
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some people
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are so much influenced by western
culture
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and they
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ignore their own cultural identity which is a loss to that particular community and country because it could become the cause of the loss of
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that particular
culture
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so it is the duty of every individual to save their own
culture
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To illustrate, a general survey was conducted in the year
of
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2018 and it had concluded that seventy
percent
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per cent
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people are responsible for the death of their own
culture
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I would like to write that people should opt
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new things but they must
rember
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remember
the roots of their own
culture
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