people shopping habits depends more on the age group they belong to than other factors.to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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, people tend to go shopping more often. Some people argue that
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individuals buy things which better suits
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rather than other factors like
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necessities
. I concur with the
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because in my opinion,
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most
people buy things
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their
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with my viewpoint before reaching a conclusion.
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with, if we talk about youngster than they will preferably buy those things which they need in
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their
everyday life and which are trendy amid other young people. They will more likely buy fresh and bright colours which
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rather than dull and boring colours. In the same way, oldsters usually purchase those things which they need in day to day life.
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rather than buying some toffees and
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chocolate
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themselves
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,
they will tend to buy milk or
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. Because it is their
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demand to eat
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, they will go for the option of buying unnecessary commodities because they have
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • digital natives
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • target demographic
  • disposable income
  • consumer behavior
  • market segmentation
  • purchasing power
  • retail therapy
  • brand loyalty
  • impulse buying
  • price-sensitive
  • cross-generational
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