These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes the life more difficult for the children. Discuss both the views.

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'Brain-Drain' is the term used to refer people who move to developed countries for better opportunities, basically, a better life.
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, some people opine that the children in these families are severely affected while others hold the opinion that they are benefitted from
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essay tends to analyse both views. I, personally, agree with the former. On the one hand, there is no denying of the fact that nations
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as Canada, USA, UK have outgrown in terms of technology, health, education etcétera. So,
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brings new opportunities and experiences for them. Education provided is not only theoretical but
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practical with the vision of the future.
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helps them to excel in their respective fields.
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, young people become self-dependent. Unlike developing and under-developed countries, they can earn from the age of 14 or 15 which
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helps them to understand the importance of money. On the flip side, children experience huge challenges when settling in a different state.
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, not only they find difficulty adapting to a new environment but language
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becomes a barrier. Most importantly, the cultural identity is lost as after a certain time they are detached from their native country significantly. A questionnaire survey was conducted in 2018 on
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young people of families who settled abroad.
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questions asked were related to their home country and its culture. The results were astonishing; only a few were familiar with their culture. In my ultimate analysis, I believe that child disconnects from his native culture and even people, but looking on a brighter side, it paves a way for new life.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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