Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many individuals feel that it would benefit young adults to pursue travel and work
oppurtunities
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opportunities
before taking up undergraduate programs at universities.
This
approach has its merits and demerits that would determine future prospects of the individual.
Firstly
, one can take the
time
to explore different countries and taking the
time
to learn
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about
new cultures or languages.
This
would prove beneficial in job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
as their horizons
are broaden
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are broadened
are broadening
and linguistic skills are enhanced. There have been increasing numbers of young people who travel to Asia and spend considerable
time
taking up
part
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part-time
time
jobs to supplement their expenses.
For example
, Thailand has seen a huge figure of long term tourists from the United Kingdom who spend their
time
travelling and teaching English to the locals.
This
exchange of knowledge benefits not only the tourists
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but the
resisdents
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residents
as well.
Secondly
,
this
exposure to work gives the person beneficial
expierience
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experience
that could be applied in the coming years.
However
,
this
time
off from school may discourage some as they feel it would be a waste of
time
and resources. Without a degree in hand, higher positions in the workforce might not be applicable to these group of people who choose to take the period to travel
instead
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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