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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. • describe the problem with the equipment • explain how this problem is affecting your work • say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir, I purchased a Laptop, model no-145, of Dell brand from your online store on 2nd September
this
 year. Now, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about that machine as I am facing some serious problems while using
this
. A number of issues are with
this
 notebook.
Firstly
, the screen of the laptop is continuously blurring since I started it to work for the
first
 time.
Secondly
, the backslash & delete keys are not following instructions.
Moreover
, I carted a pink
color
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 while order, but you have delivered the blue one to me. Professionally I am a freelancer software developer;
therefore
, I have to do all my official work through
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omputer. But, unfortunately
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I can not do any of my software-based work from
last
 week with
this
 ineffective laptop though I bought
this
 to have
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faster performance. I talked to your service department immediately after I noticed these facts, and they assured me to fix these within 2 days. But, it is already been 1 week, I have not
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 any approach from your end.
However
,
this
 is
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ery disappointing service from a reputed e-commerce site like yours. In
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 circumstances, I request you to send your serviceman to repair the laptop or replace
this
 with one
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Taslima
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