Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problem has this caused? What solutions can you suggest to this issue?

We are living in a smart era, where all people want to look smart and young. Since
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ast few decades, television has overrated the personality of zero figure
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in women. Due to
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, those females who are overweight are getting depression, as they thought they did not look beautiful.
This
could be diminished by imposing restriction on the way media is promoting
such
senseless
trend
. People are following different celebrities and want to look like them, especially women always concern about their weight and look. In
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a vital role to promote
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rend. Due to
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people spend huge money to look like young.
For instance
, A T.V actor Sushant spent five million on their facial surgery to make their face look pleasant. Apart from
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, people getting a lot of cosmetics which creat harm in
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ong run.
Such
cosmetics are
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added and creat and allergic reaction on the person body. As
this
was only tested on an animal.
Additionally
, people following a strict diet without knowing what their body requires.
Consequently
, they feel weakness in their daily routine activity and maybe lost their immune system
However
, there are some various solutions to
this
problem is,
First
and foremost, the
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government
should ban
such
harmful cosmetics products which create an adverse impact on human.
Although
,
this
would be benefited to their economy.
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ocal authority should make a restriction on
such
television program who broadcast
such
worthless brand and their promotion.
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dministration should campaign to spread awareness about the product
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made from chemical and guide them in a certain manner. To conclude
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, today media craet a
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that thin women
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a role model for all, which boost to use of several harmful cosmetics,
as a result
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eople look good through senseless ways
such
as following inappropriate diet and expensive product.
This
crate more threat to people and they lost large sums of money.
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