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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In some parts of Europe, teenagers learn practical skills in the academy, whereas several stays at school for academic education. The Institutes need to organize workshops, job placements and seminars; those will improve the children’s quality and helps them to understand the world of work.
Firstly
, in
this
 fast-growing world, it is absolutely mandatory for offspring to learn about the skills and the way to utilize the knowledge practically. Most of the jobs are now being done by robots or artificial intelligence,
that is
 accurate and efficient as well as it means
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ob market is getting saturated and competitive. Knowledge and experience both are required to achieve a career goal in life, for that, one needs to start learning from school days. Teenagers mainly learn about discipline, time management and stress handling form school and
then
 from family or relatives. Apart from
this
, I believe that children should complete their schools and graduate with flying colours, and
then
 through the internship and various training, they can adopt the knowledge and experience for professional life.
However
,
this
 competitive market is forcing the schools to brush up the skills of offspring in early age;
that is
 somehow better for them, as kids learn and adapt easily at the young age. To conclude, Problem-solving, time management, communication or other practical skills should be taught by the schools through the seminars, workshops and training. It will show the real practical life and help kids in using academic education at their job in future.
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