Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behaviour). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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students who achieve other types of success is more important. Even both have pros and cons, my opinion it is more important
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students who are good in non-academic types.
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students who have
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they could learn commonsense and a lot of knowledge from
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them for increasing their value. Unless schools
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schools need to rewards students who achieve other types of success not only about academic
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. Many students who do not have
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providing that school rewards about only academic. I think schools have to support all of
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tudents, and they have different personality, interest and talent. Like everyone has different dreams and goals. If schools give the chance of
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tudents, they will be feeling better and think school support them. In
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, students who achieve other types of success have more chance and opportunity rather than other students. They could learn and get a lot of things from non-academic subjects.
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sports make them healthy and need teamwork, so naturally
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with their friends. That can not learn from academic subjects. On conditional that they have
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experience from
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some good opportunity them in the future. In conclusion, schools have to
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ood condition in anything, like sports, music, and good behaviour not only
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