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In many places,new homes are needed,but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this?

Nowadays,the residential area for the city dwellers is mostly occupied by big factories and the people are moving towards
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ural area for constructing homes.There is an argument that the countryside should be safeguarded by deterring the construction work in these
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places
.
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,One of the major risk
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involved
 in permitting these activities leads to
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 contamination.
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 is due to the emission of fossil fuels by cars,factories and human activities which have pollutant particles is mixed with the
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 cycle and moves to the
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 table and goes towards aquifers.
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water
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 poisoning
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catastrophe
 is the major life-threatening incident faced by residents of Bhopal.
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,the existential problems including soil erosion and logging are already encountered by the rural community.
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 ,there is a greater possibility of
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 pollution by allowing the city people to
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interland for their livelihood.
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,the largest effect is on the animal kingdom which is already
excaberating
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exaggerating
 by the habitat loss,poaching and food chain disruption.These builders who
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 the suburban areas are the main reason for the destruction of rainforest and
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 leads to endangering the animal species.To illustrate,the Asian tiger population have been reached 30
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 which results in dwindling numbers within the
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,the wastes are dumped outside the control of landfill areas and waste processing centres.
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,the ocean life is
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 a greater risk for its survival due to the plastic particles in the waste. In conclusion,there are various negative effects stem from
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 transition of city people to target the suburban areas and villages for their planning of constructing their dream homes.The
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 approach of the human community should consider that their actions should not impact
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nvironment and the other species
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 the planet.

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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