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Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, technology has become the most important aspect of our life.Students have many alternative ways of playing the internet.We should provide the way for a student to spend less time on
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entertainment.
However
, we should support them for doing outside activity.Personally,I strongly agree with
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 statement. Begin with, the major advantage of going outdoor activity
instead
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omputer is it can encourage peer to make
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riend to others.
Moreover
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their comfort zone and see the whole picture for staying with others.
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hild has an event with others, they will ignore their computer.
This
 cause student will notice that there are many subjects to do on their routine.
For example
, I used to be a person who is
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catholic
 , my mom sent me to a camp.After that,I had a chance of spending time with others.
Then
 I knew that there are a lot of activities not only sport but
also
 talking.
Then
 we share our experience and point of view.So now I seldom keep myself on the online.
In addition
, outdoor activity will provide vitamins that gain a huge benefit to your health.While using technology will low down your body
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 as short eys.Some students playing
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port for fitting themself.
For instance
, my sister always play tennis, she has an antibody for keeping herself healthy.
Therefore
 she never gets overweight and has a good shape. In conclusion, the student should use a less electronic device to ensure their health.They should spend time doing outside event.
This
 will help a child to have a community and become healthy.
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