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some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them.Other people believe it's good to have friends who disagree with them. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

#people #friends
Friends are one of the most integral part in everybody's
life
.There is an argument that keeping a companion of
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ame mindset is better for them, while some people feel that having
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 friend with
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 different mindset makes them perfect.
To begin
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ame mentality always supports
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our views in every aspect and share their shoulders whatever the outcome of that view.They will be
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 our side in
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 most difficult situation of
life
 and guides to face the hurdle to achieve our goal.
For instance
,taking a very bad decision in our
life
 can lead us to face many negative consequences but the friend will always support irrespective of our mistakes.They are the only people who boost our confidence even our dear ones lose hope on us and encourages
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o get out of our tough times smoothly without
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hard work
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On the other hand
,there are some few friends who are little different always identify weakness or shortcomings in our
life
 in order to bring the best of our efforts in reaching the target.These individuals pinpoint the wrongs in our action and try to avoid them not to happen again.To illustrate,they might be telling the things which may be even done in better level to make us a perfect human being.
Eventhough
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Even though
,these negative comments were
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 annoying but they are helping to mould us a better version of ourselves. In conclusion,there are a lot of benefits for maintaining friends who
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 on our side in all the times as well as playing on the opposite side.
However
,I agree that these days,we often expect a tap on our shoulders to keep pushing ourselves in difficult times is needed rather than to point our
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 and giving advice for our betterment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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