You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Beth, My name is Jazzy and I am a member of a group of musicians who usually practice in the community hall
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every Tuesday and Friday
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. We have been told by the community
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not to use the hall for practice. I am writing to request you if you can allow our group to have access to different days. Basically, the members of a group play piano and guitar in the mentioned weekdays evenings.
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made a complaint because it could be noisy sometimes. Most of the people enjoy our music and we usually get good compliments from them. I want to suggest that we can do practice on weekends rather than weekdays and around 1'o clock in the afternoon. I understand people get disturbed on weekdays and they
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go to work so we will not play any instrument on any weekday. I would really appreciate it f you will allow us to continue on weekends. I look forward to your positive response. Best regards, Jazzy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ensemble
  • rehearsal
  • community engagement
  • cultural enrichment
  • public performances
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • musical education
  • alternative arrangements
  • schedule compatibility
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