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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

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It is thought by some people that in most developing countries than developed countries in the world that employee
satisfaction
 is one of the major
component
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components
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to be rich in the employers' lives.
This
 essay will discuss how it is important to maintain clear mental health among the workers.
This
 essay will
also
 discuss why
this
 is essential for the workers as well as the company. In the one hand, to maintain well balanced physical and mental health, career
satisfaction
 is an indispensable reason. While people at
work place
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workplace
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 ,
work
 happily, the
mployee
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employee
 could be earned 100%
work
-force. It depends on people, background and salary. It causes to reduce stress levels of workers and customers can get benefits as they wish.
For example
, research done by Harvard University in the USA revealed that business profits increased by 80% when employers perform in obvious minds. According to the aforementioned reasons, career
satisfaction
 is a vital component for both the careers and the institute. In the other hand, it has an effect on the personal and the family lives. When people full-filled with their jobs, they
work
 faithfully to the company.
Moreover
, perform according to the justification of the salary they earn. People with conscious minds
work
 healthy and happily. The absent rate will reduce.
Therefore
, job
satisfaction
 not only indirectly affects the good balance of personal life but
also
 to the family lives. In conclusion, in a profession, profession full-fullness to be rich is a major section in nations
such
 as India, Sri Lanka and Malasia. It depends on the citizens, surrounding and wages at the company. To maintain well balanced physical and mental well being among employers and the employee it is an important factor.
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