Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is imp for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give opinion.

In recent times ,children leisure time activities are frequently discussed in popular media.It is often argued by some that parents should promote their offspring to participate in

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desire

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time because of its effects in creating a

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of collaboration among children.Meanwhile,others still claim that children working alone will be benefitted more because of

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evelopment of a

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of independence and responsibility.

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sides of the argument before reaching my opinion. On the one hand,the supporters of the idea that participation of adolescents in group activities believe that it will result in

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reation of a

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of

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and collaborative efforts in

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achieving

a task.The spirit of teamwork will be extremely beneficial for the

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youngsters

in the future.Take an example of Finland,where excellent academic results were seen after the introduction of games at schools involving group activities.

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,working together in groups is vital for

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building

the spirit of comradeship among students. While

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,the advocates of the view that children should work at their own believe that working independently is extremely fruitful the youth.Independent

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activities

can lead to an abundance of confidence among children and will develop a

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of responsibility.

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,a recent survey conducted by the Uk government revealed that confidant and independent youth is more productive in the

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economy.

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,working independent contributes a lot

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adolescents education. Whereas, I believe that children should be

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encouraged

to learn

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skils as

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qualities will make them

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in the future. To sum up,I believe that youngsters should acquire

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skills as these will benefit a lot in making them mature and

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adults.