Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

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chool board should priorities co-curriculum subjects
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arly stage of
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erson can opt for any profession in their life. Many colleges and companies are looking for employees with soft skills and positive human interaction. Primary subjects
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ase for any profession but having interpersonal skills opens the gate toward more opportunities. Extracurricular modules are mostly learnt in groups while interacting with people belonging to different background and race providing an idea about their lifestyle. Drama classes
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a prime example, working with
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ariety of individuals introduce
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ense of different personality and how to coop-up with them resulting in a better person in all. Businessmen and celebrities are mostly high
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grads or college dropouts but have gained enough success just because of their talent. Students can only be able to find their hidden talent or personality if they would be allowed to explore other options, doing that at primary level can help them gain confidence and
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chances of failure. Famous Indian singer, A R Rehman, once told in an interview that he is blessed to have a music teacher at his
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who noticed his hidden and asked my parents to let him practice music which made him India’s best singer. In conclusion, every subject
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their own importance in professional and personal life but
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painting, dance and acting at
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ounger stage of life provides extra strength in personality and confidence to follow their hidden talent or subject of their own choice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • fostering
  • emotional intelligence
  • problem-solving skills
  • cultural awareness
  • curriculum
  • engaging
  • memorable
  • nurture
  • talents
  • core subjects
  • academic
  • professional success
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