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Now, many scientific institutes conduct research on live animals. Some people regard it as cruel and unnecessary while other people believe it is justified in the interest of human welfare. Discuss both views and give your reasons

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With the growing advancement of the
edical
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medical
 field, animals have become the target for scientific experiment. While some
view
this
 as barbarous and unimportant, others believe it is acceptable as it is done to protect the
uman
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human
 race. In
this
essay
,we will discuss why animals should not be used for
research
purpose
 and but why it is better to
use
 them so as to safeguard human beings. Scientists are working hard to invent new medicines to cure and eradicate various diseases. For
this
, they require living beings to see the effect of With the growing advancement of
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edical field, animals have become the target for scientific experiment. While some
view
this
 as barbarous and unimportant, others believe it is acceptable as it is done to protect
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uman race. In
this
essay
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we will discuss why animals should not be used for
research
purpose
 and but why it is better to
use
 them so as to safeguard human beings. Scientists are working hard to invent new medicines to cure and eradicate various diseases. For
this
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,
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they require living beings to see the effect of their medicines. As human life is important, they prefer to
use
 certain animals for
this
. But certain demographics of society consider
this
 brutish and not needed. They believe that even animals have feelings.
For instance
, when a study was done on different families of animals, it was seen that when
one
 member was taken away others behaved weird.
Thus
 it is said by some that all lives matter.
Although
 animal lives are important, the lives of human are superior. Some say we cannot
use
 human bodies for the
purpose
 of
research
, as
this
require
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 more lives. During reproduction maximum of
the
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humans can reproduce only
one
 whereas very animal
give
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birth
 to more than
one
.
For example
, when rat gives
birth
 the minimum
number
 is 3 and
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aximum can go up to 5.
Thus
 when it comes to the population animals are more in
number
 as compared to humans. Yes
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every living being is important but when it comes to
save
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 humans we have to compromise on others.
This
essay
 discussed both the views in detail and in my
view
 I totally agree with what the researchers are doing as it is all done for the well-being of humans. medicines. As human life is important, they prefer to
use
 certain animals for
this
. But certain demographics of society consider
this
 brutish and not needed. They believe that even animals have feelings.
For instance
, when a study was done on different families of animals, it was seen that when
one
 member was taken away others behaved weird.
Thus
 it is said by some that all lives matter.
Although
 animal lives are important, the lives of human are superior. Some say we cannot
use
 human bodies for the
purpose
 of
research
, as
this
 requires more lives. During reproduction maximum of humans can reproduce only
one
 whereas very animal gives
birth
 to more than
one
.
For example
, when rat gives
birth
 the minimum
number
 is three and the
aximum
Correct your spelling
maximum
 can go up to five.
Thus
 when it comes to the population animals are more in
number
 as compared to humans. Yes
Add the punctuation
,
show examples
every living being is important but when it comes to saving humans we have to compromise on others.
This
essay
 discussed both the views in detail and in my
view
 I totally agree with what the researchers are doing as it is all done for the well-being of humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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