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It has been said that reading for pleasure is better in developing imagination and language skills than watching TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#pleasure #imagination #language #skills #tv
There is no doubt that
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 and learning process has changed since the introduction of Television. The search for information has become easier and amusing, and the presence of innumerable channels has expedited data availability. Though the delivery mechanism has become more interactive, they have not yet become a substitute for reading books or newspapers for giving wings to fantasy and linguistic capabilities. To commence with, there are an array of reasons why the conventional way of reading is more popular. First of all, reading has become an ardent habit for many people. Everyone, whether young or old
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from
affluent
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the affluent
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 or middle class enjoys reading.
Furthermore
, books or newspapers are the cheapest, easiest and
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 medium for information. Books or newspapers are so handy that the mere flip of the pages can make you omniscient. Reading
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 brim
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 vocabulary through a variety of expressions used. Pictures
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 the icing on the cake as they tend to attract everyone and
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 them to infer and interpret in their own meaningful ways.
However
, undoubtedly, technology has given
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a radical
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 approach
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 imagination and linguistic skills, for
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, video can provide
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 full and clear view
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 reading
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 that can be recorded and repeated as per the owner.
However
, reading infuses heterogeneity to express ideas, which can take the reader to an emotional time travel. In summary, the advancements in technology are irrefutable and there would be no place to
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 in
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 ever-advanced modern world, yet,
according to
 me, reading has more benefits than drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • language skills
  • active engagement
  • creativity
  • vocabulary
  • language usage
  • passive
  • simplified
  • dialogue
  • depth
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