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When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 word

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People learn and develop throughout their entire lives. I believe that life experience and practice are the basic reasons
of
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 the humankind’s evolution. I opine that it is essential to build gardens and other recreational facilities
however
, building a shopping
center
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 is more important. I will substantiate my view in the following paragraphs. There are countless examples
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why sports and sports facilities should be built in a town.
First
 of all, the
city
 gardens not only consume much of the carbon dioxide released in the atmosphere but
also
 help in reducing pollution.
In addition
 to
this
, gardens add to the artistic and aesthetic development of the
city
.
Secondly
, for the holistic upbringing of a child
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he or she needs public spaces like parks and gym.
Moreover
, old and young can both stay fit by jogging in
theplayground
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the playground
 or by playing games.
For example
, ‘The Bean’ which is located in Chicago Downtown is a good example where a lot of
city
 dwellers come to spend their quality time and release their stress.
Although
, sports facilities give a lot of advantages to
city
 people building shopping malls are equally important.
To begin
 with, by building a shopping arcade the rent and value of land increases.
As a result
, the area in vicinity becomes plush, popular and it adds as a landmark to the
city
.
Next
, shopping plaza provides employment to citizens.
Finally
, shopping
centers
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 are private property so there is no maintenance fee,
thus
 reducing taxation.
Finally
, shopping malls make shopping more convenient. Shoppers neither need to travel
long distance
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 nor need to put an extra effort.
For instance
, the Westend mall in Aundh, Pune saved consumers unwanted travel of 8
kilometers
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,
thus
 consumers could not only save time but
also
 fuel. To recapitulate,
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ports area do give a lot of benefits to the residents building a shopping mall is equally important since
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 they provide employment and are convenient to shoppers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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