Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history.  Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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majority of the countries produced more energy compared with what
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Germany. In 2014, China had the highest production and consumption of
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electricity
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was occupied by Korea, they produced only 485 Kwh and spent 449
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kWh
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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