Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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schools. Some people consider that
History
might be one of the most important subjects, whereas others
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that Science and technology are more important compared with
History
. To me,
although
the
history
subject is
neccesary
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in a school, I believe that
Science
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and Technology are more important for the human race.
History
plays a fundamental part in our
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because it provides an outlook of what had happened in the past.
This
subject contains and shows countless events that are of great importance to
the
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humanity
. If kids are more encouraged to study Science and Technology, they will not know about specific facts and events like, how electricity was created or who discovered America.
Furthermore
,
History
shows the major changes that the world and
humanity
have faced since humans start to live in
this
world. People should know the origin and the cause of all the things and development they have today.
Nevertheless
, Science and technology might be more important as they provide more benefits and advantages for
the
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humanity
. A cause of why people find more importance in subjects like Science is because of the
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it has brought to
the
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humanity
. Because of it, many diseases and health problems can be controlled or treated, which increases life prospects in people.
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, nowadays, with the
present
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of a virus, we are all relying on the creation of a vaccine that might be developed by scientists.
This
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how important science is.
Furthermore
,
this
subject provides approaches that are useful to overcome future diseases or viruses. It
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us to be prepared for future biological threats. In regard
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technology, it is
also
important because it makes our life easier. Today, we can work, travel and live
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of it. In my opinion, these two subjects are essential and the more they are encouraged in the school, the more developments and new technologies we will have available for us. In conclusion,
History
should not be left behind because it is
also
important.
However
, Science and Technology provide more positives outcomes for
the
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humanity
which make it more important compared with
History
.
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