You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you to make an urgent order of a ceiling

fan

for the living room of my house. Kindly allow me to elaborate on what exactly I would like to purchase.

Last

week, when I visited your shop M/s Sharma Electronics, I saw a beautiful ceiling

fan

with

white

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a white

the white

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fancy light tube in its middle circle. The product was of Opera brand and its code was SOPR1232. That day, I came there with my friend and was in a hurry. So, I was not able to purchase it. Unfortunately, the old

fan

of my living room has stopped functioning

last

night and some guests are visiting my place

this

weekend.

Thus

, I require

this

product as soon as possible to be fitted. I hope you empathize with my situation and I am anticipating you to send the

fan

in two days. Kindly confirm the availability of the article by tomorrow so that I can arrange the things

accordingly

. Your prompt revert is awaited. Yours Sincerely, Sakshi

Submitted by sakshi9076 on Sun Sep 13 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

171 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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