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Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only the workers, but not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

#employees #work #home #technology #people #workers #employers
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In the contemporary era,
where
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technology has taken over
the
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development all across the globe.
For the
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 same individuals have their opinion about the workers taking
up
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the
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advantage of improvised technology in order to complete their office work from their home
itself
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, because of
this
 the employee
gets
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benefited and not the organisation they are working for.
This
 is not the actual case with the companies and their workers To commence with,every organisation
those
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listed on the stock list wants to expand their business globally, to achieve their goal
for
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 expanding industries have to first expand their
worker forces
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workforce
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,
in
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 order to do that they have to primarily
employe
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employ
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 staff from different regions of the world, nextly, they have to provide their intern's proper guidance related to their task,
such
 organisations must have a good network or a database which could be used for transferring instructions from one part of the world to another part,
this
 idea of exchanging and proliferating information could be achieved with the help of internet which is the world-famous medium known currently.
Moreover
,
in
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 the pandemic, companies that had a good information technology (IT) sector did not face any loss, as they
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 able to guide their employees over the different platforms for communication, for
instances
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, managers provide their team members, with the information about how the work will be conducted during
this
 tough time that mankind is facing today.
In addition
 to
this
, individuals prefer to buy their daily
need
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 products online from a grocery store and a shopping website. To exemplify, nowadays people do not prefer to go out and buy stuff, rather they need a medium which can fulfil their requirements with just a click on a button and even deliver the product
on
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 their doorstep, in order to meet up
this general demand organisations
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this general demand organisation
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 have to own a good network of the workforce despite the fact whether its work from home or
employe
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employee
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 is present in the office.
To conclude
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give
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 benefits to both the employees and the organisation they are working for, situations like COVID could take place at any instance without
giving
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 any alarm, and demand for online shopping is surging on a regular basis for which companies require a good network of workers enrolled with them.
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task response
Ensure that your arguments directly address the prompt. Develop a clear position on whether or not employers benefit from employees working from home. Provide direct evidence and analysis to support your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Ensure that your ideas flow logically and that each paragraph is well-developed and connected to the overall argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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